Rough Draft of a Poem

Negombo, Sri Lanka

Negombo, Sri Lanka

Lackluster

Negombo-an exotic name

Yet an unremarkable Sri Lankan city.

The irony–

A faint smile touches her lips.

/

He mistakes her interest,

His smile brightens,

His chatter more enthusiastic,

His joy palpable.

/

But her eyes stray

And rest on the sunset-

A fiery red orange ball

Slowly sinking into the ocean.

/

He remains oblivious,

Prattling on and on,

Leisurely sipping his Lion Stout,

Love sparkling in his eyes.

/

She, engrossed in her thoughts,

fails to notice his feelings

Blind to everything but the sunset,

Boredom glazing her eyes.

/

Their relationship-an exotic match.

But a boy is a boy

And a girl is a girl.

Even in Negombo.

/

**This is a rough draft for one of the assignments in my class. Feel free to comment or make  suggestions on how to improve it. Thanks. ^.^  (I had to put the slashes in because the blog auto-formats and erases my stanzas.

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2 comments

  1. Anonymous · · Reply

    To be honest, is cool, I never tried to write a poem. I guess this boy is in his own little world… guys think one way and gals another. Sorry can’t help you.

    1. I did it with a detached girl but I know the reversal (where it’s the girl who is in love but the boy doesn’t care) is also true. I was hoping it could be a poem that’s easy to relate to.

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